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It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

#people #risks #lives #risk
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Some
people
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 don’t want to settle for what they have already got
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, they insist on taking
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 in
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 risking in some situations can turn out to be beneficial,
people
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 should not continuously rely on it. On the one hand, everyone has to
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 something in order to start improving and getting better positions both in their personal and professional
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.
People
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 will miss 100% of the shots they don’t take. There is always a little uncertainty about the result of every decision but
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 should not stop anyone from being ambitious. An example of the advantages of taking
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 in personal
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 is when someone confesses his
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her feelings to a loved one.
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 is really a
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 that
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 person takes because, he
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she might get rejected and, his
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her feelings get hurt.
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, if he
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she succeeds,
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 will become the best decision he
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she has ever made. The same thing applies to taking
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 in one’s professional
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.
People
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 will not get hired or promoted if they don’t take the
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 of applying for new positions.
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,
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-taking seems to have many disadvantages and, it is not recommended to be done very often.
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, compromising both the case of career and personal
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 can be extremely stressful.
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 might cause mental and physical problems in long term.
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, the chance of going down with failure is something that everyone should consider.
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 is why
people
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 need to think through their decisions more carefully before acting on them. Taking a bad
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 in professional
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 may only jeopardize one’s career but, in personal ,
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 the cost is irrecoverable
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,
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 need to be very conscious about it. In conclusion, it seems to me that taking
risks
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 is not always beneficial and
people
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 should be aware of the consequences of their decisions.
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