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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insect as a food source. However, some people believe that insect are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drowbacks of eating insects?

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Nowadays, as well known, our planet has a constantly growing population. Due to
this
, countries should make use of edible
insects
 as a
food
 source.
However
, some people believe that harvesting
insects
 can negatively affect nature. So, from my point of view, It benefits both society and the environment positively.
First
, with growing
food
 demand all over the world, sustainable insect farming can provide an alternative source of protein which requires fewer resources than an equivalent amount from traditional protein sources. The culinary aspects of edible
insects
 provide variety in
food
.
Moreover
, starting
making
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 use of edible
insects
 as
food
 might end the world's hunger, in Africa,
for instance
. In fact, restaurants and
food
 markets can make a lot of money by including
insects
food
 cuisines, attracting more customers and serving starters, and salads that contain
insects
.
For example
, many street
food
 shops in Thailand and China
that
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serve salads, breakfast with
insects
 and other
food
 items are expanding their business because the number of customers is increasing each day.
In addition
, we
also
 should think about our ecological situation. The farming of
insects
 gives rise to a steady supply of waste products that can be used to fertilize soils and improve crop growth.
Furthermore
, domesticated
food
-producing animals produce methane which causes the greenhouse effect.
Finally
, there are so many opinions: opposite and the same. And I assume, that arguments about how and what to eat better will never end.
However
, each person has a right to choose how to live and what to eat. And no one can choose better than you.
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