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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

#success #wealth #belongings #measure #person
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In today’s world, a group of
people
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 think if someone is rich and has a lot of properties, he is a successful man. I believe belongings and
money
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 is the main factor to see if someone is successful or not,
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, to reach
the
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success
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 you should find the way and road to get rich which is not simple as taking pills. Most of the
people
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 on the richest
people
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 list are successful
people
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 who have businesses and companies. In my opinion, we should call rich
people
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 successful too, because they did hard work in the past to reach their targets and all of them had a dream one day to be a successful man, which they have both
money
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 and
success
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 right now.
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, Ilan Musk is the richest
person
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 in the world, he is the owner of Tesla and SpaceX which are both Ilan’s achievements.
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, wealth and
money
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 is the major unit to measure
success
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.
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, as I said the main goal to be a successful
person
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 is to get rich and the answer to
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 not simple because each
person
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 can have a different way to find that
money
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 and make himself a successful
person
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.
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, Steve Job was the founder of Apple; he was not rich and successful at
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 but when he created his company and started selling iPhones, his profit increased immediately,
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, he earned more
money
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 and he becomes one of the most successful
people
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 in the IT field. To conclude, what I am telling you is to get rich
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 and after that
success
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 will come with it, which you have to find the way to that because the major factor to measure your
success
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 is your
money
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.
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