Some people regard eating meat as completely wrong. To what extent do you agree?

People
’s
opinion
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opinions
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differ, as to whether or not
people
should eat
meat
. While there are some strong arguments in favour of vegetarianism, I still believe that
meat
is necessary for
people
’s health up to certain age. There are several reasons why
people
should
et
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eat
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meat
.
First
of all, it has a great nutritious role in our daily diet.
For instance
, minerals like zinc, magnesium and ferrous are very common in lambs and beef and may lead to an increase in
the
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apply
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blood quality and boost our immune system.
For example
, in my country
pediatricians
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paediatricians
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highly recommend
to give
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giving
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kids lamb, because it is rich in vitamins B3, B6,
B12
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and B12
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and these vitamins are very important for efficient energy, amino acid and red blood
cells
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production.
In addition
, chicken breasts have been used by athletes as a requirement in their special training.
On the other hand
, many doctors say that there are many benefits
in
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vegetarianism.
Firstly
, it reduces
risks
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the risks
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of heart diseases and cancers
such
as colon cancer.
Second
, the risk of obesity and high blood pressure is
also
lower.
In addition
to the health issues, the majority of
people
who
has
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chosen vegetarianism, believe that we should treat animals in a human way. Religions like Buddhism and Judaism, have
teaching
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on
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about
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the humane treatment of animals or strict rules about diet. Everybody knows that
cow
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the cow
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is a sacral animal in India. In conclusion, modern ideas about health,
environment
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concerns and the ethical treatment of animals have persuaded an increasing number of
people
in recent years to become vegetarians. But I still believe that
meat
is an essential part of our diet table
especially
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,especially
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for youngsters.
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