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Some modern artists receive huge sum of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.

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 masterpieces that are well paid for and help the creators do a living and continue to create new things, while the others find it hard to sell their artworks. Many people think that governments should take responsibility to gain a balance of
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 inequitable problem. I personally think that I strongly disagree with
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 statement. On the one hand, it is said that life is not fair, get used to it so it is unsurprising if many creators can't sell their
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 and build a reputation by themselves.
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, the unfair situation makes them try their best to create and make a campaign to promote their
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 efficiently.
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, providing that there is no competition, there is no development of life. The creator has to be more creative and put more effort into their
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 and time by the time it can become a masterpiece and helps them receive a large amount of money.
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 has no standard and the taste of
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 is different. To illustrate, painting can be adorable with ordinary people;
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, it is valueless with artistic professionals.
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, the government has no right to control and solve
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 problem by law. Plus, people
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 cannot judge others through their taste in
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 and force them to buy things that they dislike. In conclusion, if the creators
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 hard and are creative, they can receive huge sums of money, influence, and reputation
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, the governments have no solution to solve the problem since
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 can't be forced. .
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