You recently did a short cookery course.The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter: - describe what you enjoyed about the course - say how much cooking you have done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to share my feedback on your cookery
course
which I
have
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attended one month back. My name is Aman Malik, and I enrolled
for
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your
course
on north-
indian
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food. It was one of the best decisions of my life because
such
a wide variety of dishes were taught in the seven days program.
Also
, I really enjoyed the practical session where it was
also
shown
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how the use of spices can make a big difference in the taste. Earlier, I used to order food from outside, but ever since I completed the
course
, I am cooking my dinner daily and feel really proud to eat delicious self-cooked food.
Moreover
, I received so much applause from my friends when I invited them over
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, and the credit goes to your
course
. When I told my friends about your school, some of them
also
wanted to join the
course
. They are,
however
, looking for a program which teaches south-
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recipes. It would be great if your could curate and offer a
course
on similar lines as many of my friends would be surely joining it. Please let me know whenever you start the new
course
. Yours faithfully, Aman Malik
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