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Life expectancy In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging populations.

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developed
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 substantial increases in
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expectancy
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.
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reasons
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of
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 the problems and some
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 to reduce the impact
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ageing
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an ageing
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 population. The average expected
life
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 is increasing because of the global improvement in the factor of
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, social politics and public healthcare. Elderly
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a
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poor health
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diabetes
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a
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special
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. The
government
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 has
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 up with a large budget for it to serve the increasing
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an
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ageing population.
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, the problem
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 the country with increasing
life
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expectancy
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 is that there will be an increase in the percentage of
people
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 who want to
claiming
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tax
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 and benefits when they retired.
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is affect
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 strongly to the
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 or economy.
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 the other hand, the
government
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 should implement a huge of
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measure
meansure
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measures
 to produce with the problems of increasing
life
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expectancy
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. Old
people
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 can still contribute to
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society if proper
regulation
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regulations
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are introduce
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, in some
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 they can open the rule to re-enter the workforce who want to work or use their knowledge to add
values
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 to the community. The senior
people
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 should have free training
how
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on how
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 to contribute
with
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 the new generation with their relevant experience as well as how to keep
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certain to
successful
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. In conclusion, the rising
life
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expectancy
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 brings its own issues to the individual as well as to
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society. To deal with it, the
government
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 needs various steps to tackle the problem their country might encounter.
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