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Most societies have homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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Despite the fact that we consider ourselves as a quite developed and modern
society
, the problem of homeless
people
 appears up to now. Some
people
 believe that monetary help is the best way to
support
 bums.
However
, I opine that we should help by providing moral
support
, education, skill development and utmost in providing employment.
First
 of all, after the industrial revolution
society
 faced an enormous gap between wealthy / affluent / well-off and impoverished
people
. Wealth became directly connected to technologies. To socialize and have sustainable living modern humans should have a set of hard skills.
Secondly
, money is only a temporary solution for homeless
people
. Constant financial
support
 from the government can decrease the willingness to search for a job and provoke addictions.
On the other hand
, it can raise intolerance
to
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of
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 destitute
people
, because/ as / since
society
 supports them through taxes.
Instead
, we should find reliable help that can provide permanent and
long term
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long-term
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 solutions.  There are many proven
support
 models that exist if we wish to back them and as a whole, we can make a stronger and better
society
 and the world.
For example
, we should/ ought to focus on boosting their mental health and help to develop hard and soft skills.
Nevertheless
, to address their immediate needs, we should provide food, proper clothes, shelter and health care.
Lastly
, we should provide education,
skills
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and skills
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 development programs and help them to provide employment which can lead to living ethically and keeping their heads high.  To summarize, we all can make a better
society
 if we put some thoughtful consideration, programs and backing models in place.
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