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Many students find it is difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school, what are the reasons? what could be done to solve this solution?

#students #attention #school
It is true that many
students
feel
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 hard to pay attention and concentrate in an educational environment.
This
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reasons
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 behind
this
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adverse
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the adverse
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effects
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 with it. There are a number of factors for concentrating lessons on
students
. Chief among these is that
students
 feel bored when studying
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monotonous subjects. Take literature as an example,
students
 in
this
 class are easy to fall asleep by the traditional teaching techniques in which teachers mention huge of
theory
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theories
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 and the
students
 will write these things in their notebooks. Another possible reason is that
students
 are allowed to have
smart phones
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smartphones
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 with them at school,
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which
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 makes the
students
 hard to focus on the lesson. It means learners will check their notifications and surf the internet
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 a habit when they have their phones on the table. Various measures,
nevertheless
, can be adapted to tackle
this
 situation.
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 possible approach is that it must replace the old teaching techniques with the new
one
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ones
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 which are more interesting and easy to focus on.
For example
,
by
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using
the
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slides which have some animations or visual effects to receive
attention
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 of
students
,
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also
 has
students
 change
the
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 attitude toward the subject.  The second solution is that schools should not allow
bringing
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students to bring
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 their phone
in
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into
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the
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class.
This
 solution can restrict
students
 from using their
phone
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phones
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to play games or do other things. In conclusion, it is
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 fact that trouble
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concentrating or paying attention
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student
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students
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 in
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a
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class can stem from many causes,
however
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however,
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 steps can be taken to ameliorate
this
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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