People are surrounded by advertising. This both affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays with the development of digital technology,

everyone

can easily access any type of printed information or online data. Via the spread of news on digital

platforms

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in the maze of

commercials

This

has an influence on those who believe it is crucial by the unpositive

way

to their life. From my point of view, I partly disagree that advertisements will always affect people’s lives in a negative

way

To begin

with, Not only at the present but some advertising forms

also

appeared a few decades ago with eye-catching and magnificent forms. With the existence of

commercials

everyone

can know many new things about local or worldwide and broaden their horizons via

multitude

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of forms of marketing.

Therefore

, if the advertisement does not exist, it will be difficult for

everyone

to be informed about some things which just appear on market.

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, Burji Khalifa, the highest building in the world

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is located in the United Arab Emirates, thanks

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modern technology

everyone

around the world can know about it.

However

, advertisements should be limited or some unexpected corollary cannot be prevented and fixed. Meanwhile, at the present time

commercials

are being abused and spread a lot both in real life and online, these all create discomfort and disturb

everyone

. All the routes in VietNam all have

ads

with big size to small size, more or fewer words,it will force

everyone

on that road to have to look and focus on it even in any corners.

Moreover

, more and more junk and deceptive

ads

appear on the Internet even on some well-known applications

such

as Youtube, Facebook and Twitter. These nonsense

commercials

just keep reappearing many times but the managers of those applications do not interfere and solve trash

ads

for users.

In addition

, with the increasing number of children using the Internet, kids may understand the message of the advertisement in a negative

way

and facsimile to the commercial videos, which may cause hazardous accidents to children when copying the videos.

For instance

, watching too many shopping

ads

will make children have

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materialism and shopping habits, if these habits are maintained until they grow up, they will waste money on buying clothes and stuff and do not know how to save money, and if they see comparison

ads

, they will have a comparison theory and they will be shy when comparing themselves to others.

Hence

, parents should

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phone time to keep them away from harmful advertisements. In conclusion, display advertising through digital platforms or on the wall is

basic

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and effective

way

to introduce new products to

everyone

who can understand the function and try it. My take on

this

is the

ads

need to limit to

everyone

do not panic when there are a lot of

commercials

surrounding them. It will be an extraordinary and gorgeous world without trash and squalid

ads

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