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A lot of people have become dependent on technology as it plays a big role in our daily lives. Do you agree that living in computer age has more advantages than disadvantages? Describe the positive and negative impacts of technology on our lives and give your opinion.

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It is undeniable that the advancement of
technology
 has
been
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developed significantly nowadays, and it plays an essential role in our daily lives. From my point of view, it provides both benefits and drawbacks, described in the following paragraphs. There are various advantages
from
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 the development of
technology
,
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 personal,
education
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 business.
First
 of all, using social media helps
people
 extend their relationships.
For example
, they can use online platforms like Facebook and Instagram to find new friends or
people
 who have the same interests.
Also
, they can relieve updated news and information from many media sources.
Secondly
, it benefits pupils in terms of education. Students can learn anywhere today. To illustrate, they had to stay at home since the pandemic of Covid 19, learning through educational applications allows them to continue learning without going to school.
Finally
,
people
 can run a business globally without travelling.
For instance
, they can make a video conference which is similar to face-to-face in order to keep in touch with their partners.
However
, it
also
 offers drawbacks.
As a result
 of its convenience,
people
 tend to pay less attention to their
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real life
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 relationships. Some children might focus too much on
technology
such
 as playing on computers which can isolate them from society.
Moreover
, some
technology
 like smart programs makes
people
more
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lazy.
For example
, pupils usually use a calculator
instead
 of thinking by themselves. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the advantages of
technology
 outweigh the disadvantages, but it
also
 offers some serious impacts if we use it in the wrong ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependent on technology
  • digital platforms
  • instant communication
  • automation
  • advanced software solutions
  • access to information
  • educational resources
  • screen time
  • health issues
  • eye strain
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • privacy concerns
  • cybersecurity threats
  • identity theft
  • data breaches
  • overreliance
  • face-to-face social interactions
  • social skills
  • isolation
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