with growing population in cities , more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it positive or negative development.

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in urban cities have increased at an alarming rate. A lot of people like to live in a
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with small or no outdoor
areas
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.
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without outdoor
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development in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there
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some positive
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effect
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to live in a small
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. The
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and foremost is that people who live in a smaller
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or
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flat
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,
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don’t have to pay much money for it.
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, smaller
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or
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flats
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are cheaper to rent to buy.
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kind of accommodation is suitable for those youngsters who are studying or just have a job.
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USA newspaper, in America
2016
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, that 87% of the
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liked to live in a small
house
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without outdoor
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.
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to live in a small
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, limited open space gives
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healths
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. Due to
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, they cannot do any kinds of physical activities at
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and they become victims of many diseases
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bad impact on people’s
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. In less space, they cannot see outdoor views. They live alone in
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home
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without outdoor
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, and they feel bored and
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frustrated
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illustrate, a survey taken
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Time of New York newspaper , in America
2018
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, was that living in a smaller
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no outdoor
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have
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increased from 64% to 87% in
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5 years. In
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conclusion
, I want to reiterate my words that living in a small
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is very good for
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and happy life, and it’s
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negative
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effect
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on their health ,mind and body.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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