with growing population in cities , more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it positive or negative development.

In
this
contemporary era,
population
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in urban cities have increased at an alarming rate. A lot of people like to live in a
house
with small or no outdoor
areas
.
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essay will deliberate the positive to live in a small
house
without outdoor
areas
, but
also
negative
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development in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, there
are
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some positive
effect
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to live in a small
house
. The
first
and foremost is that people who live in a smaller
house
or
flate
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flat
without outdoor
areas
,
they
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don’t have to pay much money for it.
Secondly
, smaller
house
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or
flates
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flats
plates
flat
are cheaper to rent to buy.
This
kind of accommodation is suitable for those youngsters who are studying or just have a job.
For example
, a survey taken by the Time
of
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USA newspaper, in America
2016
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, that 87% of the
majorities
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liked to live in a small
house
without outdoor
areas
.
On the other hand
, there are few negative
effect
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to live in a small
home
.
Firstly
, limited open space gives
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effect
on
individuals
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healths
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. Due to
this
, they cannot do any kinds of physical activities at
home
and they become victims of many diseases
such
as obesity or diabetes .
Secondly
,
it’s
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also
bad impact on people’s
mind
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. In less space, they cannot see outdoor views. They live alone in
small
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home
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without outdoor
areas
, and they feel bored and
frestrated
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frustrated
.
For
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illustrate, a survey taken
the
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Time of New York newspaper , in America
2018
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, was that living in a smaller
house
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no outdoor
areas
have
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increased from 64% to 87% in
past
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5 years. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, I want to reiterate my words that living in a small
home
is very good for
simple
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and happy life, and it’s
also
beneficial for older and younger people, but it’s
also
negative
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a negative
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effect
on their health ,mind and body.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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