In past , the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is , therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

In previous years, educationists were supposed to be the information
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to the students. But in recent years, there
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two different opinions regarding the role a tutor plays. One of which is that teachers' role is no longer vital in
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as students are getting wider exposure to diverse sources from which they can learn efficiently. But I strongly believe nothing can take over the place of a teacher in educating people.
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with, schooling combines a holistic approach to making
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understand different theories and their subsequent application in real life.
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there are plenty of resources
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we can not completely depend on those as they are not always based on the right information and
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misguide us.
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teachers with expertise and proficiency
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subjects will make sure their students are learning the true facts.
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teachers can make weak pupils learn a thing through diverse approaches,
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in other ways of
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there is no way of interaction and
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fail to teach properly. Another point worth mentioning is that it may
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to learn existing theory from multiple sources of information
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but in order to explore new ideas,
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concepts or discover something new
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student
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help from experts
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can not be done by any other option.
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, I
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from my supervisor as they shared their valuable views and intelligence with me
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conducting my undergrad research. Online resources barely helped me
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build up my basic understanding of research. In conclusion, academicians are an inevitable part of the education sector. Diverse sources of wisdom may help understand things better, but it is nothing compared to the role of the teacher.

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coherence
Your view is clear, but some ideas are not well shown. Put a big idea in each part and show how it supports your view.
task
Give one strong example for each idea and explain how this example backs your view.
language
Use small, simple words and fix long sentences so it is easy to read.
structure
Open with a short line that states your view and finish with a short restate of it to make the end clear.
strength
The writer has a clear view on the topic.
strength
The essay uses an example to back a point.
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