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A teacher’s ability to relate well with students is more important than excellent knowledge of the subject being taught.

I remember some
teachers
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 from elementary to college.
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 is because people only remember others who gave an impression to them. Some
teachers
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 looked very kind and understanding in my eyes. They had a special relationship with all of the
students
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. That’s the reason I still remember them right now. In my opinion, a teacher’s primary goal is not only to teach their
students
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 about the things of the subject being taught but
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 how to show respect for one another. They teach us how to get a better
life
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 and be a good human when we into society. In order to do that, the
teachers
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 have to be able to relate well with
students
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. When I was in senior high school, I had an English teacher I will never forget. For me, she is not only a teacher but
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 a tutor for a whole aspect is my
life
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. Upon a time in class, I didn’t focus on what she
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 taught. I was busy with myself. I drew random pictures in my book and she was like just smiled at me and said, “is okay if you prefer to draw your imagination in your book than hear my teaching but you have to respect others that
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 to you.” She was not angry and I just froze for a second. She respected my interest but I had to pay attention when she talked. Since that time, I love English because my teacher is her. As an adult, I realize that what she said is called basic ethics needed in society or work
life
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. If we want to be respected by other people, we have to do so. It’s a little thing but
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 an excellent knowledge in
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. Knowledge of the subject being taught is primary, but at the same time, secondary.
Teachers
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 have to use different ways to approach their own
students
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. For these reasons, I confidently claim that the teacher’s ability to relate well with their
students
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 is more important than excellent knowledge about the subject being taught.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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