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Band 4.5

You are leaving your job and would like to recommend your friend apply for your position. 
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * ·  describe the job * ·  explain the reason you are leaving * ·  tell him/her why you would recommend the job to them

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Dear Lori-Anne, Hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you about the exciting news,
however
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, I
also
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 need your favour for that. Unfortunately, I am leaving my job position as a Medical Administrative Assistant at Sunshine Hospital, Hamilton, Ontario, and I thought you
are
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the
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apply
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perfect for
this
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 role as you
are excel
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 in the administrative type of work.
This
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 position mainly focuses on the clerical side of
hospital
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,
such
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 as
,
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 managing
Patient's
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patients's
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 Medical Records, scheduling
an appointments
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appointments
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, and insurance processing. I am fully confident that you are able to do all these duties or responsibilities with proper dedication
as well as
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 discipline.
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 I love to work here, I am thinking
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give
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 my entrance exam for an Administrative Executive. So for that, I am planning to move to Alberta,
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 which I don't have any other option
instead
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 of leaving the job.
Otherwise
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, I can never imagine
about
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that decision as
this
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 workplace is a good fit for me. I will definitely miss the whole team
,
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 and the work I am doing here. I would highly recommend
to
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you for applying
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this
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for this
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 job opportunity. Though you have
set
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a set
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 of
mix
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 skills, relevant experience, and excellent in team
colaboration
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collaboration
. Most interestingly, it's just located
nearby
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 your community,
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, you do not have to worry about the commuting distance.
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, you would really like the working atmosphere , team and rules or regulations. If you are interested, just let me know I would
feel
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 happy to assist you in the application process
,
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apply
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 and explain the requirements for any
cerification
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certification
 that you will need with the salary structure. Looking forward
from
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 hearing you. Best Regards, Rupinder Kaur .

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your paragraphs to cover one main idea each. This will enhance clarity and make it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures and connectives to improve the flow of your ideas, which can increase coherence.
task achievement
Ensure you have a formal closing for a letter, such as a simple "Sincerely" or "Best regards," to enhance the professionalism.
task achievement
You provided a detailed description of the job and relevant recommendations for your friend, showing a clear understanding of the task.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and supportive, which is appropriate for the audience and context of the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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