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some people think it is a good idea to wear a uniform at work . Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer with relevant examples from knowledge or experience.

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It is a different perspective about whether wearing
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 to the workplace is
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good or not.
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 the specific
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dress code
dress-code
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dress code
 policy in the workplace. The use of
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uniforms
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 in the working environment has several advantages for both employees and
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employer.
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 similar outfit in
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outfit
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 can bring
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 feeling of unity between the workers. That feeling can boost collaboration and teamwork which is crucial for business
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 in the professional world.
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also
 can identify their employee easily by seeing the special
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work hours.
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 that, the specific
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the company
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 logo can be an indirect advertisement media as the
employees
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 commute and pass through many people outside the office Despite
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its benefit, some people think that the use of
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 has some
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disadvantages
disadvatages
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disadvantages
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