An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause ? what can be done to deal with this situation
It is evident that jobs in developing countries likely provide
less
salaries including for teachers and doctors than those in developed ones; Correct word choice
lower
thus
, some professionals from poorer areas tend to work
in better ones nowadays. Yet this
phenomenon causes several problems
, including lack
of experts and Correct article usage
a lack
lack
of service quality, which should be addressed by taking some measures Correct article usage
a lack
such
as giving higher earnings for
Change preposition
apply
them
.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Initially
, there are 2 main negative impacts that are caused by the trend of working overseas for certified workers in poorer regions. Firstly
, it is obvious that professional human resources can influence the development of countries in general. Hence
, losing a great deal of them will reduce the possibility of being more evolved. For example
, there are several health problems
in Africa that are hard to tackle because of the lack of doctors. Moreover
, some doctors do not prefer to work
there in order to find better areas. Secondly
, if most professional workers from developing regions tend to work
abroad, there would be problems
with service quality. For instance
, Papua New Guinea is still struggling to improve their quality of education, nevertheless
, they realize it is hard because their certified teachers choose to work
in Indonesia
, Malaysia and Singapore.
However
, making sure the experts' prosperity by giving appropriate salary
is an effective solution to tackle the Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
problems
. It is clear that
their goal to look
for overseas occupation is to receive a better income. it means that the Change preposition
in looking
job
in some developing countries Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
has
not Verb problem
do
provided
proper earnings Wrong verb form
provide
fitted with
their qualifications. Take a look at the example of the civil servant scheme in Verb problem
that fit
Indonesia
in which employees will receive salaries based on their educational level, expertise and experience. Therefore
, the more professional they are, the higher fees they get. As a result
, the certified ones will prefer to work
as civil servants in Indonesia
, even though Indonesia
is a developing country.
In conclusion, the trend of working abroad could cause a shortage of experts and qualities and the best measure to solve the problem is to provide better and more suitable fees according to
the expertise level.Submitted by IELTS_8 on
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task response
In your introduction, be sure to state the problems arising from the migration of professionals and the solutions to deal with this situation. Also, make sure to address the two questions in the prompt thoroughly and directly.
coherence and cohesion
You have generally organized your ideas well and used cohesive devices but the essay lacks clear progression of ideas within paragraphs. Also, try to use a wider range of linking words to improve coherence.