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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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in recent years children like adults become more and more exposed to
computers
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 and plays important role in all individual life. young age
students
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 began to spend most of their time.
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 essay will clarify the positive and negative of utilizing
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 in the youthful era As children consume their enormous moments on
computers
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 which assist them to expand their
knowledge
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 of technology.For,example due to the recent pandemic, and crises all classes have been conducted online and they spend their whole school hour in online classes enabling them to enhance their understanding.
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,
students
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 bring more information about their subject immediately by searching on the topic where they can be readily assisted by the latest machinery and improve their
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computers
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 provide ways to develop
knowledge
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 and help to get practical
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 as well.on other hand These days basically all services are available online,for ,instance to order food ,to book a tickets or hotel people are using a mobile phone and software applications.
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 , spending uncountable hours on the computer can lead to health issues increasing screen time will be a bad impact on eyesight and may affect one's body posture.the younger generation is wearing power glasses in their younger age because of eye strain .current study shows
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 get more failer in online classes than offline.according to research ,survey 70% of children are suffering from refractive errors.
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 websites
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 as Instagram , Facebook , and youtube are appealing so youngsters find them more attractive causing them to increase their screen time
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 causes a huge effect on studies not only but
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 isolates them from society in ,conclusion the young generation pays more of their moment on
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 for expanding their proficiency in machinery .regardless
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 may get addicted to some
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 and
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 distract them from concentration as well as eye strain.
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 one should not overused.
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