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Some people believe in the era of e-technology, printing newspaper and magazines will cease to occur in the near future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We live in a futuristic world where
e-technology
 is so much advanced that in a near future, it is most probable that the role of printing
newspaper
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 will come to an end. I believe that
this
 statement is true and I will elaborate on it . Today
e-technology
 is
superceding
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superseding
 old methodologies and
this
 is called business sustainability. In our daily routine, we observe that forms in the banks are digitalised, we do not fill
paper
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 forms anymore.
Moreover
, money transaction is reduced,
thus
 internet banking is taking advance over cash payment. Obviously, I do believe that printing newspapers and magazines will cease in the future as printing
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newspapers is costly and at the same
time
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 we see
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a campaign
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campaign
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campaigns
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 to go paperless to preserve
the
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nature.
However
, the pleasure to have a cup of coffee while reading a newspaper is unique. I believe that the older generation is the one to keep
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 alive today. Today, with social media and
internet
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the internet
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accessible
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 to mostly everyone, news
are
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 spread more easily.
For
example
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 a catastrophe in a country is quickly known through social media. Notably, the advantage of
e-technology
 is more significant.
As a result
, many people do not need to travel
long
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distance
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distances
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 to perform transactions or
booking
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bookings
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. Even now, booking of air
ticket
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 is done through e-ticketing. In conclusion, there is no doubt that
printing
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 of magazines and newspapers will be eradicated at some specific point
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 time. We are seeing more benefits of
e-technology
 rather than drawbacks. In future, we will see more development
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e-technology
.
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