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Space explorations costs tax payers an extra orbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space explorations?

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Space
exploroations
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exploration
explorations
is
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price
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 taxpayers an
extraorbitant
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exorbitant
 amount of
money
 every year.
This
 essay
discuss
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 the advantage and disadvantage of spending
money
 on
explorations
.
Firstly
, there are many advantages of spending
money
 on
space
explorations
such
 ass, individual cultures will develop and
science
 will develop. The
first
 pros are persons have a chance to see
space
.Observing
space
 is an incredible experience for a community. An extensive survey conducted by CNN revealed that spending
money
 on different activities about
space
 is absolutely
worth
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. It would increase people's Cultures.The
second
 pros are a big
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development
developtment
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development
on
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of
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science
 due to spending
money
 on
space
 exploration.
Science
 the one of the huge
section
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,
Therefore
 people must improve it . A study carried out by NASA showed that
expenditure
money
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of money
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 on
space
 events will
60
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% of increased
speed
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the speed
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 of
science
 projects. İt will increase
countries
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countries'
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economy
economies
economys
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economies
However
, there are many cons of
expenditure
money
 on
space
explorations
such
 ass
explorations
 are not a necessity and it is too expensive.The drawback is
space
 discoveries are not
a
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 obligation. people do not have to do that. Research conducted recently indicated that individuals should not
expenditure
money
 on
space
 because it is not a priority. İf they spend too much
money
 on unnecessary things
money
 will
wasted
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.The
second
 drawback of spending
money
 on
expenditure
 is it is pricey.The price is so significant for individuals. A study carried out by KOC University showed that if
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government
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goverment
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government
spend
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spends
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money
 on
space
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government's
governments
goveremnt's
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government's
money
 will suddenly decrease. After that
country
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 economy
impact
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 badly. İn conclusion,
Space
explorations
 are so expensive.There are many pros and cons of spending
money
 on
space
explorations
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. Professors suggested that Government should not spend a lot of
money
for
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space
explorations
.
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