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These days are more people going abroad discuss advantages and disadvantages

Nowadays,living abroad is becoming popular.There are many people who want to live overseas especially adults due to
attractive
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 lifestyle. There are many pros and
cons
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this
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the fact. Let us begin,
looking
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 at the benefits
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of to
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 going foreign countries.
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, your social circle has
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increased incredibly. You become familiar with different kinds of cultures and foods. You meet different people
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belongs
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 to different backgrounds and in
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 way you get
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a chance
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 to become familiar with their cultures and foods.
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, you get
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a chance
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 to better your lifestyle and role model for other family members by getting
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 job or higher education
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abroad. Turning to the other side of the argument, there are
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a few
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cons
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 of living overseas.
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,
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, there is a language barrier. You have to
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work hard
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work hard
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 to achieve your targets.
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, you have to sacrifice your personal life in many ways
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for
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 example, when you live abroad you are unable to see your family members like parents,children wife and other siblings.In
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way
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 your family suffer difficulties. To sum up the discussion,
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 would believe that whether
,
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 there are
cons
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of
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to
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 living abroad but pros
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overweigh
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 the
cons
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. An achievement of
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a dream
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 lifestyle
override
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overrides
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 all the negativities of living abroad.

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  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
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