Some people think that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the fuel resources in the world. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays,
people
surmise that travelling by
air
should be limited due to the fact that it causes
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problem and
consume
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a
lot
of fuel resources in the
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. I somehow agree on
this
matter. There are a
lot
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of
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travelling
treavelling
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travelling
, by land, by water, and by
air
.
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means of
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are great
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for individuals who travel a
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because
they are able to go
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one
place
and
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in
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another. I would like to give emphasis on travelling by
air
, It is more way convenient due to the reason that it is
time
-saving and more convenient. For
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that
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you can easily
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destination in a matter of limited
time
. By
this
, you are able to have a
lot
more
time
to
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task
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.
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you can use your
time
to
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something
that is
way more important.
In addition
, travelling by
air
is costly it involves more money as it offers more
convenient
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to
people
who opted to choose
this
means of travelling. And what's more the services and experiences that the
people
who are working on
this
platform can offer.
For
example
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before boarding on
planes
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you immediately get a
place
where to wait for your
time
to board which is comfortable because it is
air
-conditioned and
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rooms are readily available. And once inside the
airplane
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, in- Flight workers assist you immediately and offer food
that is
included in your service.
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it will not only end after
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serving
seving
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serving
food but until you leave the premises of the airport which decreases the level of stress you get by travelling. Another reason, is
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place
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are only capable to reach
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my
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means of
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an airplane
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airplane
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that is
why
people
nowadays are still choosing to travel by
air
because there
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in
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no
another
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option for them to choose. For
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intances
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places like Batanes,
although
you can
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this
place
by
sea
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the sea
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.
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the government has not tried doing it and no option to travel by sea for
tourist
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tourists
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and visitors I conclude even
people
wants
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to restrict
air
travelling
because
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the detrimental effect
to
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the
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global fuel. There are still more
reason
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to consider travelling by
air
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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