The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
The pie charts compare how
people
from
Canada
and Australia access
news
, these sources include Television,
Radio
, Print, and Online.
Overall
, it can be obviously seen that mostly approached information via Television and Online,
both
acquired the highest position,
while
Radio
was the least prioritized among the given methods.
To begin
with,
people
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the people
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in
Canada
accessing
Wrong verb form
access
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news
by watching Television
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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40 % which is higher than Australians just 3%. More than a haft of the total dwellers in Australia were getting information by searching online,
while
the figure for Canadians was slightly lower, at 36%.
Moreover
,
both
Print and
Radio
were the least
using
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used
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method of accessing
news
in
both
countries. The proportion of
people
getting information in
Canada
stood at 14%, which was double the Australian rate. Approaching
news
through
Radio
was the least popular in
both
Canada
and Australia,
while
the former accounted for only 7%, the latter minimally about 2%.
Additionally
, the source is not specified just around 2% to 3% of
people
in
two
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the two
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nations, correspondingly.
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