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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant
#news #canada #australia #information #features #comparisons
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The pie charts compare how
people
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 from
Canada
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 and Australia access
news
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, these sources include Television,
Radio
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, Print, and Online.
Overall
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, it can be obviously seen that mostly approached information via Television and Online,
both
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 acquired the highest position,
while
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Radio
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 was the least prioritized among the given methods.
To begin
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 with,
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people
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the people
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 in
Canada
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accessing
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access
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news
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 by watching Television
was
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apply
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40 % which is higher than Australians just 3%. More than a haft of the total dwellers in Australia were getting information by searching online,
while
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 the figure for Canadians was slightly lower, at 36%.
Moreover
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,
both
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 Print and
Radio
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 were the least
using
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used
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 method of accessing
news
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 in
both
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 countries. The proportion of
people
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 getting information in
Canada
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 stood at 14%, which was double the Australian rate. Approaching
news
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 through
Radio
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 was the least popular in
both
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Canada
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 and Australia,
while
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 the former accounted for only 7%, the latter minimally about 2%.
Additionally
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, the source is not specified just around 2% to 3% of
people
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 in
two
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the two
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 nations, correspondingly.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, news, radio, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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