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Peoples believe that individuals are responsible for their happiness. Others believe that different factors of people’s life influence happiness. Discuss both views. State your opinion

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Happiness
 is a word that many
people
 want to truly feel.
However
,
people
 can not have it all, it is a luxury many of us do not have;
this
 raised the question, is
happiness
 a
choice
?
People
 were split into two groups:
one
 claiming it is a
choice
, while the other says it depends on factors in
one
's
life
. On
one
 hand,
people
 claim that leisure of
happiness
 is a
choice
. It depends on a
person
's mentality, and how they view
life
; when they look at the half-filled cup, do they focus on the empty space or the full
one
? Or do they just see a cup as half full half empty, seeing the bad and good at once?
This
 group strongly believes that it depends on
one
's
faith
;
faith
 can be in religion, in
life
, in good, and in anything. Even
faith
 in the
world
 is evil. Opposing the opinion: if
one
 has the
choice
 of being happy,
then
life
 would be easier.
Happiness
 is not a
choice
, but rather is a feeling built on factors, and is influenced by what is happening in the
world
. By
this
 mentality,
people
 with depression have the
choice
 to be happy, and
people
 suffering from
life
 have the
choice
 to be happy. Yes,
one
 can smile through the pain, a
person
 has no control over how they feel; only sociopaths have the ability to not be affected by the
world
's good and evil. Overall,
people
 have their own opinion and have the freedom of choosing how they feel about the
world
, or how they view it. Part of the popularity believes that
happiness
 depends on
one
's
faith
, while others believe that it depends on
one
's
world
. Humans differ from other species because they have the freedom of
choice
, they have a brain that thinks on its own, allowing them to have different opinions. In my opinion,
happiness
 depends on
one
's
faith
; the nostalgic feeling comes from a
person
's satisfaction with what they have. A
person
 can be the richest in the
world
 and has it all, but still feel like they have nothing;
on the other hand
,
one
 can have nothing at all, but a simple smile from a loved
one
 can make them feel like they have everything they need.
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