Professional sports are a very large industry in the world today. The most elite players can get contracts worth many millions of dollars. Some say there is too much money in sports and that it defeats the purpose of the actual game.

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sports

play a vital role in today's generation. compared with past days, the

sports

industry is very large in the world today. the famous players are offered contracts like ads or shoots, they get a lot of

money

to do it. and yes it says that there is a lot of

money

sports

. some crowd think that that's the reason why it defeats the purpose of the actual

game

. I disagree with the statement and will be talking about it later.

firstly

talking about the people who think that indirectly the

game

of the player can be influenced by the

money

that is

been offered nowadays to them. the reason behind

this

thinking can be, that they might be assuming that if the player is not paid well sometimes that can affect the ability of the

sports

person in the

game

however

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this

does not affect the ability of the person to play well

for instance

talking about Virat Kohli ( famous Indian cricketer). Virat will not be thinking about the

money

he will be paid,

instead

, he will more curious about his

game

as he is the captain of an Indian cricket

team

secondly

looking towards the pay which they get is because they have earned that level of respect and that's the reason why they are famous among us.

for example

, I have witnessed

this

when auctions were held for the IPL

team

there were many

folk

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in the

team

who

were

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was

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bought at a higher price

for example

Yuvraj Singh was the highest paid due to his record. so

this

does not affect or demoralize other

team

members. to summarize some may think that pay can defeat the purpose of the actual

game

but

that is

not the thing. I would like to suggest society should enjoy

sports

and believe in the industry

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elite players
contracts worth millions
economically rewarded
generate significant revenues
ticket sales
merchandise
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employment opportunities
commercial enterprise
entertainment culture
critics argue
inherent qualities
teamwork
physical fitness
financial emphasis
mental health
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