Professional sports are a very large industry in the world today. The most elite players can get contracts worth many millions of dollars. Some say there is too much money in sports and that it defeats the purpose of the actual game.

sports
play a vital role in today's generation. compared with past days, the
sports
industry is very large in the world today. the famous players are offered contracts like ads or shoots, they get a lot of
money
to do it. and yes it says that there is a lot of
money
in
sports
. some crowd think that that's the reason why it defeats the purpose of the actual
game
. I disagree with the statement and will be talking about it later.
firstly
talking about the people who think that indirectly the
game
of the player can be influenced by the
money
that is
been offered nowadays to them. the reason behind
this
thinking can be, that they might be assuming that if the player is not paid well sometimes that can affect the ability of the
sports
person in the
game
,
however
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this
does not affect the ability of the person to play well
for instance
talking about Virat Kohli ( famous Indian cricketer). Virat will not be thinking about the
money
he will be paid,
instead
, he will more curious about his
game
as he is the captain of an Indian cricket
team
.
secondly
looking towards the pay which they get is because they have earned that level of respect and that's the reason why they are famous among us.
for example
, I have witnessed
this
when auctions were held for the IPL
team
there were many
folk
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in the
team
who
were
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bought at a higher price
for example
Yuvraj Singh was the highest paid due to his record. so
this
does not affect or demoralize other
team
members. to summarize some may think that pay can defeat the purpose of the actual
game
but
that is
not the thing. I would like to suggest society should enjoy
sports
and believe in the industry
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite players
  • contracts worth millions
  • economically rewarded
  • generate significant revenues
  • ticket sales
  • merchandise
  • advertising
  • employment opportunities
  • commercial enterprise
  • entertainment culture
  • critics argue
  • inherent qualities
  • teamwork
  • physical fitness
  • financial emphasis
  • mental health
  • personal lives
  • unethical behaviors
  • doping
  • sustain performance
  • socially beneficial endeavors
  • grassroots sports facilities
  • access to sports
  • underprivileged communities
  • incentivize athletes
  • strive for excellence
  • inspiring future athletes
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