Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

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believe that
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and actors as they play a more vital role in the whole society. From my perspective, all kind of jobs has their value, the more money they get, the more risk, shortcoming, and pressure should be taken.
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and professional.
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degree.
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unfair that the movie star and the NBA player is all billionaire because
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their talent or gift is inborn. Most of the good looking and height
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genetic.
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but not least, not only it is hard to become a lawyer, teacher, and doctor, but they
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noble things: defending, teaching, and helping, which definitely has a great contribution.
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,
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should be paid more.
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like a tremendous machine, and everyone in
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and screw. We play our own
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, mesh together, and collaborate with each other.
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,
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sociology. There is no gap and level between all of us.
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, in terms of the industry of sport and entertainment, sometimes we just focus on the prestigious one, which does not fair enough due to the fact that other
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not as successful as
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doesn’t wealthy either.
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but not least, needless to say, every
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has a drawback, so as actors and athletes.
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, being famous, there is no privacy in their life owing to they are forced to show up
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social media and there is no scandal allowed. What’s worse, they have to bear the
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and the unstable work.
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popular basketball or movie
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extremely high payment. In conclusion,
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who show up in the basketball course and movie
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life.
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have a lot of
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to overcome.
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, I don’t agree that any other worker
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higher salaries.
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