Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?
While
people
believe that job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
such
as lawyers, teachers and doctors should be paid for
more money than Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
job
like athlete
and actors as they play a more vital role in the whole society. From my perspective, all kind of jobs has their value, the more money they get, the more risk, shortcoming, and pressure should be taken.
Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
To begin
with, indeed, the so-called ‘dream jobs’ worth
higher Add a missing verb
are worth
salary
as it Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
known
for Add the auxiliary verb
is known
well-educated
and professional. Add a missing verb
being well-educated
In other words
, the job
can’t be done if we didn’t have Correct article usage
a master
master
or Change noun form
master's
doctor
degree. Replace the word
doctorate
Secondly
, it also
unfair that the movie star and the NBA player is all billionaire because Add a missing verb
is also
of
their talent or gift is inborn. Most of the good looking and height Change preposition
apply
is
genetic. Change the verb form
are
Last
but not least, not only it is hard to become a lawyer, teacher, and doctor, but they doing
Wrong verb form
do
the
noble things: defending, teaching, and helping, which definitely has a great contribution. Correct article usage
apply
Thus
, these
Change the determiner
this job
these jobs
job
should be paid more.
However
, the world just
like a tremendous machine, and everyone in Add a missing verb
is just
this
machine is like cog
and screw. We play our own Correct article usage
a cog
role
, mesh together, and collaborate with each other. Fix the agreement mistake
roles
That is
,
the structure functionalism in Remove the comma
apply
the
sociology. There is no gap and level between all of us. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, in terms of the industry of sport and entertainment, sometimes we just focus on the prestigious one, which does not fair enough due to the fact that other people
who is
not as successful as Change the verb form
are
them
doesn’t wealthy either. Change the pronoun
they
Last
but not least, needless to say, every job
has a drawback, so as actors and athletes. For instance
, being famous, there is no privacy in their life owing to they are forced to show up in
Change preposition
on
the
social media and there is no scandal allowed. What’s worse, they have to bear the Correct article usage
apply
people
Change noun form
people's
rumors
and the unstable work. Change the spelling
rumours
Hence
, it is common that the
popular basketball or movie Correct article usage
apply
player
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players
possess
extremely high payment.
In conclusion, Fix the infinitive
to possess
people
who show up in the basketball course and movie theater
Change the spelling
theatre
seems
Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
have
a Add the particle
to have
colorful
life. Change the spelling
colourful
Nonetheless
, they also
have a lot of obstacle
to overcome. Change to a plural noun
obstacles
As a result
, I don’t agree that any other worker worth
higher salaries.Add a missing verb
is worth
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