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People can know about cultures and life through internet. So there is no need to travel to other countries to know about the culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
 contemporary era, the
internet
 has become the main part of everyone's
life
. Some amount of
people
believe
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 that they can learn and search for a lot of
things
 related to various types of
cultures
 and
life
 on the
internet
 without exploration to other countries. I firmly disagree with
this
 notion. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view. There are a number of reasons to learn about
cultures
 and traditions by travelling to a
country
.
First
 and foremost we can know the real and exact circumstances being travel to the
country
. After visiting different nations we can see their culture, traditions, beliefs, clothing, their past history from the older adults who have exact
knowledge
 of
life
 experiences that they can not learn from the
internet
. To illustrate
this
, many
things
 can not experience on the
internet
such
 as
people
's nature, talking with them and so on.
Thus
, visiting a
country
 is the best to learn about different
cultures
.
Secondly
, the
internet
 provides only theoretical
knowledge
. Practical
knowledge
 is far better than theoretical
knowledge
. A person can grasp and retain practical
things
 easier than written material. While travelling to the
country
,
people
 can see and learn many
things
 related to culture and traditions and by ,
experience
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the experience
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 they never forget these
things
.
For example
, Doctors can not perform surgery on patients on the basis of theoretical
knowledge
.
However
, it is only possible with practical
knowledge
 and
life
 experiences.
Therefore
, experienced
things
 have a long impact on a person's mind. To conclude
this
,
although
 there is a plethora of
knowledge
 we can seek from the
internet
however
 to learn and know about the
cultures
 and other exact
things
 yet
people
 have to visit the places.
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