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People can know about cultures and life through internet. So there is no need to travel to other countries to know about the culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
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 contemporary era, the
internet
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 has become the main part of everyone's
life
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. Some amount of
people
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believe
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 that they can learn and search for a lot of
things
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 related to various types of
cultures
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 and
life
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 on the
internet
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 without exploration to other countries. I firmly disagree with
this
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 notion. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view. There are a number of reasons to learn about
cultures
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 and traditions by travelling to a
country
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.
First
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 and foremost we can know the real and exact circumstances being travel to the
country
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. After visiting different nations we can see their culture, traditions, beliefs, clothing, their past history from the older adults who have exact
knowledge
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 of
life
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 experiences that they can not learn from the
internet
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. To illustrate
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, many
things
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 can not experience on the
internet
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such
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 as
people
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's nature, talking with them and so on.
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, visiting a
country
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 is the best to learn about different
cultures
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.
Secondly
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, the
internet
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 provides only theoretical
knowledge
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. Practical
knowledge
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 is far better than theoretical
knowledge
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. A person can grasp and retain practical
things
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 easier than written material. While travelling to the
country
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,
people
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 can see and learn many
things
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 related to culture and traditions and by ,
experience
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the experience
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 they never forget these
things
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.
For example
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, Doctors can not perform surgery on patients on the basis of theoretical
knowledge
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.
However
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, it is only possible with practical
knowledge
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 and
life
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 experiences.
Therefore
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, experienced
things
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 have a long impact on a person's mind. To conclude
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,
although
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 there is a plethora of
knowledge
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 we can seek from the
internet
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however
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 to learn and know about the
cultures
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 and other exact
things
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 yet
people
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 have to visit the places.

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