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Some People Say That It Is Possible To Tell A Lot About A Person’s Culture And Character From Their Choice Of Clothing Do you agree of disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice
People
 come from different communities and traditions,
also
 they have
a
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different traditional looks and various choices to wear attires. In
a
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society, it is always argued by some
people
, that it is easy to predict
about
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a
person
 's culture and character from his attire. I completely disagree with
this
 statement. In my point of view, we can know only basic information about a
person
's culture, whereas we cannot judge his attitude deeply by his
outfits
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outfit
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.
Firstly
, in many places or countries,
people
 prefer to wear their traditional
appearances
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appearance
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, from which we can know basic things,
such
 as from which community is belonging, where he
ives
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lives
.
For example
, a lady wearing a burkha and covered full body,
whom
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we can assume that she comes from a Muslim community, but we cannot know more than that about her.
Moreover
, nowadays,
people
 wear western
clothes
,
such
 as T-Shirts, Jeans and formal
clothes
 in
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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workplace
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.
Hence
, it is difficult to know about persons' origins from their
outfits
.
Secondly
,
people
 create an image of a
person
 from his or her
outfits
, which leads us in the wrong direction. To illustrate, Oxford university surveyed
people
 and revealed that the assumption of a
person
's character made from his
clothes
 is 98
percentage
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 wrong.
Furthermore
, we can judge a class of
person
, if
wear
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wears
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 branded
clothes
, but it is not possible to predict
that
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whether
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 he is a good or bad
person
Thus
, it is impossible to know a
person
 deeply from his
outfits
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outfit
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 without having a conversation with him. To conclude, traditional
clothes
 are
identity
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the identity
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 of culture, which describes the basic introduction of a
person
, but
this
 cannot predict
person's
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a person's
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 character. I opine that
,
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 society should stop
imagine
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 a
person
 from his attires without having words with him.
Submitted by bhavendra.bhensdadia on

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