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Some People Say That It Is Possible To Tell A Lot About A Person’s Culture And Character From Their Choice Of Clothing Do you agree of disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice
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People
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 come from different communities and traditions,
also
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 they have
a
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different traditional looks and various choices to wear attires. In
a
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society, it is always argued by some
people
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, that it is easy to predict
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a
person
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 's culture and character from his attire. I completely disagree with
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 statement. In my point of view, we can know only basic information about a
person
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's culture, whereas we cannot judge his attitude deeply by his
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outfits
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outfit
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.
Firstly
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, in many places or countries,
people
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 prefer to wear their traditional
appearances
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appearance
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, from which we can know basic things,
such
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 as from which community is belonging, where he
ives
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lives
.
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, a lady wearing a burkha and covered full body,
whom
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we can assume that she comes from a Muslim community, but we cannot know more than that about her.
Moreover
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, nowadays,
people
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 wear western
clothes
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,
such
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 as T-Shirts, Jeans and formal
clothes
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 in
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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workplace
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.
Hence
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, it is difficult to know about persons' origins from their
outfits
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.
Secondly
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,
people
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 create an image of a
person
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 from his or her
outfits
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, which leads us in the wrong direction. To illustrate, Oxford university surveyed
people
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 and revealed that the assumption of a
person
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's character made from his
clothes
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 is 98
percentage
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 wrong.
Furthermore
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, we can judge a class of
person
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, if
wear
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wears
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 branded
clothes
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, but it is not possible to predict
that
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whether
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 he is a good or bad
person
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, it is impossible to know a
person
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 deeply from his
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outfits
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outfit
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 without having a conversation with him. To conclude, traditional
clothes
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 are
identity
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the identity
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 of culture, which describes the basic introduction of a
person
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, but
this
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 cannot predict
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person's
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a person's
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 character. I opine that
,
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 society should stop
imagine
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 a
person
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 from his attires without having words with him.
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