One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

Nowadays,
traffic
is a major problem across the globe. People are paying heavy taxes for using the vehicle whether it is public
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private. In my opinion, raising the fee is not a solution.
To begin
with, every country is facing
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for
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traffic
because it multiplies the pollution which is a reason
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global warming. People used
vehicle
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vehicles
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for their convenience and even if
tariff
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tariffs
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are going up
then
also
humans cannot stop to buy
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the machine
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machine
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machines
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.
For example
, in past few years, rates of automobiles and fees are increased but
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purchasing is increased by 30% as compared to previous years.
Furthermore
, it is difficult for
poor
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or middle class to afford it.
In addition
to
this
, humankind will go against the law if tax rates will be on
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side.
Hence
, more taxes means
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on
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public .
On the other hand
, it is essential for humankind to
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about the environment.
However
,
there
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next
generation cannot be suffered from any environmental causes.
For instance
, many countries
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started
scheme
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for odd and even number of vehicles to control
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traffic
.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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must have to issue guidelines and training for
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the general
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public to avoid
commuter’s
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problem
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.
Thus
, it can be controlled with the efforts of awareness. To conclude, it is
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of all the citizens as well as authorities to take steps to reduce
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traffic
and pollution.
Therefore
, authorities should not impose more
tax
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taxes
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as
masses
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the masses
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are already paying road, toll
tax
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taxes
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and many more.
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