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The increase in tourism has led to the destruction of the environment, thus tourism ought to be banned in certain areas. What is your opinion?

#tourism #destruction #environment #areas
Nowadays, people have great interest to see
the
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different places which
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 related to our ancient times. Due to
this
,
number
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 of travellers
are
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 elevated which leads to
ruination
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the ruination
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 of our surroundings. Many masses believe that these sites should be prohibited. In my opine,
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humankind have
right
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the right
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 to travel and visit
the
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places.
To begin
 with, we all are connected to our tradition and ancient buildings are
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the significance
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significance
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of
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 our culture.
Moreover
, humans want to see the beauty of the countries.
For example
,
Taj
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the Taj
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 Mahal is
seventh
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 wonder of the world and millions of tourist
comes
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 to see it every year.
Moreover
, its beauty was not
same
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 as 19th century because of travellers.
In addition
 to
this
,
tourist
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tourists
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 enjoyed the ancient buildings but
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 take care of cleanliness. They write
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 on walls and put cans,
plastic
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and plastic
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 in plastic which badly affects the species.
Hence
, we cannot stop the visitors to explore the regions.
On the other hand
, Government has to set
instruction
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instructions
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 and impose
fine
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 for
public
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the public
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 who try to create
any
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pollution and harm
the
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nature.
Furthermore
, individuals have to feel that it is their responsibility to take care of
environment
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the environment
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 for future
prospect
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prospects
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 and for
next
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the next
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 generation.
For instance
, in many famous gardens where all
type
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 of ferns and petals are available, on
notice
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the notice
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 board
specially
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 it is written that if anyone plucked
flower
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then
 they have to go for imprisonment or
heavy
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 fine.
Thus
, these steps can help to save Mother Nature. To conclude, I believe that ban is
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solution
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the solution
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 to
make
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 our climate clean. The guidelines have to
set
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 by authorities for
limited
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a limited
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 number of visitors per year.
Therefore
,
this
 is a solution which assists both
to
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our environment and human beings.
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