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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Some believe, that in coming years, everybody will tend to read what they want online
instead
 of buying published newspapers or books and paying. I must say, from my point of view, I totally disagree with
this
 and there is no chance for it to happen. Here are my reasons. First of all, I cannot deny that technology makes our lives easier and it is the main reason why so many people are inclined to use it as a news or training tool. Of course, it is reasonable to use it.
On the other hand
, there are some old-fashioned people,
such
 as me, who love to touch papers
while
 reading them.
Although
 having plenty of benefits, the technology cannot replace actual paper-based reading materials.
For instance
, even though all my friends have internet access, no one uses it in order to catch the news or read any novel because of the passion of feeling the material.
Moreover
, from my experience, reading online may lead to many medical problems in the future.
To look
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Look
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 at a device for a long time makes
eyes
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the eyes
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 tired and causes a great number of defects of vision, meanwhile, it
also
 might lead to
the
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a
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 disorder of posture. It is the main reason for people who work on a computer during the day usually start to use glasses and some of them are
also
 suffering from hernia.
For example
, being a postman, my mother works on a computer to save the documents on the system and now, there is a hernia inception on her back.
To sum up
, as far as there are many thoughts about how reading materials will be replaced with online reading, I am inclined to believe it will not be
such
 a
changing
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.
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Task Achievement
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Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, create a logical sequence of ideas and use appropriate cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, paragraphing). Maintain clarity by organizing paragraphs around a central idea and ensure each paragraph progresses logically from the one preceding it.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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