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Some people believe that people have the right to University education and government should make it free no matter what they are financial backgrounds extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #right #university #education #government #matter #backgrounds
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Education
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 plays a great role in an individual's life and
people
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 have the right to
education
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. Some
people
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 think that the public has the right to university
education
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 and the
government
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 should make it free of cost for all irrespective of student's financial background. I strongly disagree with
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 statement and I think that the authorities should help only poor
children
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 to complete their
education
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. I will explain my reasons for it in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, there are many reasons why the
government
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 should only
offer
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 free
education
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 for poor
children
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education
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 rather than rich
people
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,
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 is because wealthy
people
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 have the capability to afford their
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 with expensive college fees but poor backward classes individuals cannot afford that
education
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.
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, the
government
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 should help poor
children
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's
education
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 by providing scholarships and grants which help them to finish their university and college studies.
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, developed countries like Singapore and the USA offers fund and scholarships to their poor
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 to finish their
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, which will
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 be beneficial for the country's growth.
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, the
government
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 should
offer
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 free courses for lower backward class
students
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 who are eligible to study in prestigious universities but due to lack of financial support, they failed to admit to these colleges, so the authorities should only
offer
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 these
students
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 to finish their courses for free of cost.
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, it totally wastes money if the
government
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offer
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 free study for rich
children
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,
this
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 is because they can afford their
education
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, so the authorities should help other
people
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 who are suffering from accommodation and food problems. To conclude, I think that the
government
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 should only provide free
education
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 for poor backward classes
students
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 rather than wealthy
people
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, it will beneficial for the countries to develop their economic and
education
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 sectors more effectively.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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