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many people jude success solely by money material possessions. however, success can be achived or measured in other ways. what are you opinions on this topic?

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Success
 is measured differently by individuals.
Although
 in recent times many
people
 assign
success
 solely to monetary possessions.
This
 is due to the society we live in.
However
, I believe
success
 encompasses a lot more
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than
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that
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than
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 money a
person
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 possession
To begin
 with,
people
 assign
success
 solely to financial
wealth
 due to
world
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the world
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 we live in. Without
doubts
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,doubts
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 the world
have
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 evolved to be a capitalist society
such
 that
wealth
 is the only
criteria
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criterion
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 of power.
As a result
,
people
 are configured to attribute financial
wealth
 to triumph.
In addition
, parents even make the children study courses with higher remuneration
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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 for their
offsprings
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offspring
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 to be a
success
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successful
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 in future.
For instance
, in 2020 a survey carried out by the United Educational, Scientific and Children Organization (UNESCO) on secondary students in Final classes in Lagos Nigeria showed that 90%
students
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 aspiring
course
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 of Study were chosen by their guardians due to the high remuneration.
However
, grading
success
 solely on financial possessions makes individuals
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lose
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loose
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lose
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 sight of other sim and victory.
In addition
,
people
 tend to be oblivious of little successes in their life like job promotion, education achievement and even
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childbirth
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child birth
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childbirth
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 as they think only
wealth
 is regarded as
success
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a success
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. In conclusion, In contemporary times, many individuals attach
success
 to financial possessions
as a result
 of the world they leave in. Unfortunately, I think
this
 is a negative development as
people
 tend to
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loose
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lose
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 sight of other achievements and goals
such
 as career promotion and
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academic
accademic
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academic
 progress.
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