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Band 7

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.

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It is often argued that selling only national
food
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 in the supermarket is more advantageous for preserving ancient
culture
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.I completely disagree with
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 opinion and think that imported international
product
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 is much more important than in their own
country
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, And will discuss the reason why below in
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 essay. In the beginning, every nation has its own
food
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culture
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, inheriting a tradition from one generation to the
next
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. Many people believe that shops should only keep selling the
product
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 in the
country
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, protecting against disappearing their old civilization,
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 as the Japanese, known as nationalistic. Even though they stand for nationhood, they are adept and still keep on their civilization.
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, some argue that the
product
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 should vary more globally in store. It is evident that the
food
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 imported and exported business between the international
country
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 are major income markets, and selling the
product
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 to foreign can help improve financial affairs.
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, if you were a Thai person, you would trade traditional Thai
food
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 worldwide, which call Pad- thai.
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 why these will make lots of flow funds, from the manufacturing process, job offers, multinational transportation, and advertising.
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, by globally purchasing the goods, acquire more art and
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,
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 as pasta from Italy. People are comprehended how to prepare ingredients, and delightful to cook them. There is an interchange between nations. In conclusion, despite consuming
food
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 from the supermarket the
country
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 in support maintain its own
culture
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. I believe that people can understand and communicate with each other through civilization.
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, importing products nationally from another nation can more benefits outweigh than drawbacks.

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