some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes, and entertainment is likely to result in a society of indviduals who ony think abouth their own wishes . other peoplebelieve that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them . discuss both views and give ypur own opinion.

Many people think that letting
children
choose what to eat, wear, and play with may result in making them selfish personalities in the future.
However
, other people claim that raising
children
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to take
decisions
is beneficial for them. I believe that
youngesters
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should be able to decide what they want from
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age for several reasons. On the one hand, if the kids are allowed to decide their
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everyday
everday
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everyday
choices, they may take
decisions
that have negative outcomes
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their
thier
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their
lives.
For instance
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youngsters are free to choose their
food
, most probably they will choose fast
food
and desserts
instead
of healthy
food
and vegetables.
Moreover
, they may wear clothes that are not suitable for the occasions and situations.
For example
, in Sweden, some schools let the students dress freely
what
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they like when going to
schools
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, so some students wore sports outfits, while others wore home
pijamas
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pyjamas
.
Also
, if they choose how to spend their free time rather than the parents choose the best for them, they will choose video games that will harm their eyes and brains rather than
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useful
interactive entertainment methods.
Thus
, all of these could result in making them
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persons in the future.
On the other hand
, I consider that letting the infants take
decisions
and actions regarding their lives is vital for them for many reasons.
Firstly
, when
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young
children
decide and choose what they prefer to eat , wear, and entertain
by
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the assistance of their parents in what is
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most suitable for them, they will grow up as a decisive, effective
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for
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society.
Secondly
, their character will develop faster,
in addition
to their skills and capabilities, so they will be reliable to lead the nations in the near future.
For example
, in Japan, the students in
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primary schools are
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to decide
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from selected healthy
food
and
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from selected games at
this
stage, which resulted in making Japan's youth
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the most productive and reliable youth around the world. In conclusion, I hold the notion that
children
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characters
charachters
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characters
are developed when they are taught to take
decisions
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about
abouth
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about
their daily lives at
young
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a young
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age, and
this
result in many benefits for themselves and the societies.
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