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News channels only give good news on publications. Do you agree or disagree

#news #channels #publications
Definitely, the media and
news
 bulletins convey all word
news
, including all facts and information, not only good
news
 but
also
 bad
news
. I radically disagree. In
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 I will explain my viewpoint and lend my opinion. Undoubtedly, the world has changed today from what it was before, The wars and starvations are increasing year after year.
Moreover
, the crimes and thefts are more than before.
Therefore
, we often see disturbing
news
 during newscasts period, not the mention breaking
news
 is surprising and unpleasant.
For instance
, the recent war between Russia and Ukraine, which causes loss of life and
further
 destruction and homelessness.
This
 is why all
news
 has become bad and
depressed
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.
On the other hand
, the
news
 channels broadcast good information and
results
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 that promise improvement in the conditions.
Furthermore
,
this
news
 is most often about sports and the economy and public health.
For example
, the approaching date of the World Cup and its mechanisms regulation, and the level of unemployment has decreased recently from what it was before. Plus, the levels of Covid-19 are less than before and new drugs have discovered. In conclusion, not all the current events are unsatisfactory and
on the contrary
, there is satisfactory
news
. The media platforms must transmit both sides.
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