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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

#more #students #study #colleges #universities #countries #do
In
this
 modern day, many
people
 decide to
study
study
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in
other
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another country
other countries
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country
 where they live. Unquestionably, studying abroad decision has some benefits and drawbacks as well. In my opinion, studying abroad will give
much
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 more positive impacts than
the
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disadvantages.
This
 essay will explain some reasons why studying abroad is a good choice for
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 who
want
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 to continue their education
in
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at
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 the universities or colleges level.
Firstly
, the motivation for
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people
 to continue
study
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 in
the
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a
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 foreign
country
 can
be
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vary. Some popular reason is they want to get
better
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a better
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 educational
experience
 than in
home
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their home
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country
.
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World class
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 universities might not be based in their
country
 so in order to get it, some
people
 decide to
study
 abroad.
Although
 it needs extra preparations like studying a new language,
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a
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bigger money for transportation, tuition fee and living cost,
educational
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the educational
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experience
 is a crucial thing for an individual’s future
life
, whether as a professional worker or an entrepreneur.
For instance
, I have a former classmate who graduated from
foreign
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a foreign
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 university and easily get
in
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into
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 the top four consulting
company
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companies
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 in the
world
 which gives a really good salary.
Therefore
, studying abroad
especially
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 in
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a top
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top class
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 university can lead someone to get better future.
Secondly
, studying in foreign countries will enrich
student’s
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students’
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experience
 in adapting
with
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to
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 diverse
people
.
This
 is an important
life
 skill as the
world
 enters
globalization
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the globalization
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 era. The
world
 is much more borderless and in
the
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professional
work
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 an individual might have to collaborate with other
people
 around the globe. By studying abroad, an individual can learn how to communicate with other
people
with
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of
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 different
nationality
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nationalities
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,
race
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races
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, and cultural
background
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backgrounds
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.
This
experience
 would never be taught in the local school,
instead
, a person can train
this
 skill by living in
other
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a other
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 place than their home nation.
For example
, I have a friend who has completed his
study
 in
other
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another
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country
 and has good skills in coordinating professional work with
corporate’s
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 partner representatives from other countries.
Also
, he has
very
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a very
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 good career progression
than
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 other colleagues who have not experienced living outside the homeland In summary, studying abroad can make someone get a good education and multicultural
life
experience
. These two aspects can bring
positive
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 impact
for
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on
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 someone’s
life
 in the future.
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