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Although most people are richer than in the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of stress in modern life, and how could stress be reduced?

#people #life #stress #record #levels
Modern
life
 brings comfort and makes
people
 richer than
the
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 past.
Although
 modern
life
 with new technology seems comfortable
but
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it is very stressful and the number of
people
 suffering from
stress
 is increasing.
This
 essay will discase the issue and how to manage it.
To begin
, there are
lots
 of reasons behind
this
 and the major one is that
people
 have to
work
 harder than past in modern
life
. In modern
life
, all job is specialized and
people
 can do what they specialize in.
this
 kind of
work
 needs too much
time
 with
lots
 of care. In fact, these works are hard and
stress
 full.
As a result
, in modern
life
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people
 have to
work
 for a long
time
 with
lots
 of attention and it causes
they
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them
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 to suffer from
stress
.
Moreover
, the high cost of living is the
next
 reason in modern
life
. As we know, Modern
life
 arises in modern cities. Living in
the
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 modern city is expensive. Many modern living expenses are paid with different bills.
People
 have to pass bills frequently.
Thus
, they have
stress
 paying bills every month. The problem can be solved with different measures. The most important is that
people
 spend more
time
 on their entertainment. Having fun can help
people
 who have
stress
 to decrease their suffering from
stress
.
For example
,
people
 can spend one or two hours in the park and relax for refreshing. The
second
 one is that
people
 ought to use software to help their employees.
For example
, there are
lots
 of marketing software that help
people
 to manage their clients and they cause
people
 to spend less
time
 doing
this
 by themselves.
As a result
, they
work
 less
time
 with more efficiency that which leads to less
stress
. To recap, there is no denying the fact that modern
life
 seems very stressful. In order to deal with
this
 issue,
people
 have to increase their free
time
 for entertainment and they should use modern software.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic pressure
  • Cost of living
  • Financial strain
  • Workload
  • Job insecurity
  • Gig economy
  • Technology
  • Information overload
  • Social isolation
  • Digitally connected
  • Competitive world
  • High expectations
  • Societal expectations
  • Work-life balance
  • Relax and recharge
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