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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay taxes to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays
people
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 have to put aside a part of their incomes to pay
taxes
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.
however
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, according to some notions, it is their
money
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 and there is no reason to give it to the government.
this
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 essay will argue why it is completely logical to pay
taxes
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 and it is important for nations.
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 the amount of
money
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 each person has to pay as
taxes
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 is not a big deal, all
taxes
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 payments altogether can make a big change and promote
people
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’s
lives
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.
for example
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, it can be spent on the
country
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’s construction and infrastructure projects and on providing public services. so if all citizens consider
tax
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 payment as a national duty to enhance the quality of their own
lives
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 and their
country
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’s development, it can benefit
people
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 in the
first
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 step.
tax
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 rates usually are introduced according to
people
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’s income. it means
people
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 with high salaries pay more
taxes
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 and
people
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 who earn less
money
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 pay less
money
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 or none. according to
this
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 structure not only there is no pressure on poor
people
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, but
also
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taxpayer’s
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money
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 can spend on helping underprivileged families. in
this
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 regard, poverty can all disappear and all
people
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 live
a
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happy and safe life. some argued that
tax
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 payment is unessential because governments can afford the expenditures of countries’ development and management by using other resources like exporting natural resources or attracting tourists to their
country
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.
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, it cannot be a good reason to avoid
tax
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 payments. because the cost of
country
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 administration cannot be covered by side incomes like tourism and it is more reasonable for
people
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 to pay a part of their
money
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 to boost the quality of their
lives
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 rather than save it and live in an undeveloped
country
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. to sum up,
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 essay argued that it is completely crucial that
people
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 dedicate a part of their salary to
taxes
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 to provide a better place for their families and their fellows as a unity because they cannot do the same changes in their
lives
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 and in their
country
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 when they save
money
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.
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