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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It can
cause
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 severe social and practical problems to live in a
country
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that is
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 compulsory to speak a foreign
language
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. I completely agree with
this
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 statement because it can
cause
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 a
communication
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 barrier and not get a suitable
job
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. The main reason why I think living in a
country
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 where you cannot speak its
language
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 can
cause
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 social and practical problems is that it causes a
communication
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 barrier.
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 is to say that when foreigners do not know how to speak a local
language
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 well, it results very hard to contact and interact with local people.
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, it is difficult for them to make new local friends, and mostly their interactions with local people result in misunderstandings.
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, many Somalis people who moved to Germany to study and live there permanently could not stay more time after their graduation and
finally
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 come back to their
country
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 because of their lack of
communication
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 skills. The other reason why I think it can
cause
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 social and practical problems to live in a
country
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 where you have to speak its
language
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 is that it is not easy to get a suitable
job
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.
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 is because when a foreigner applies for a local
job
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 it is compulsory to meet a local
language
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 requirement which is not easy for the foreigner to fit in.
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, many qualified persons have to work unskilled jobs because of their limited local
language
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 skills.
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, many
Somali’s
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 doctors who moved to the US are working in unskilled jobs because of the English
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 requirements. In conclusion, I believe that living in a foreign
country
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 where you have to speak a local
language
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 can
cause
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 a
communication
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 barrier and make it difficult to get a suitable
job
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.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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