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Some people believe that restaurants are a waste of time and it is cheaper and healthier to cook at home. Do you agree or disagree

Urbanisation and modern life have presented us with a number of challenges, none of which are too rudimentary to be ignored.
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, the crux of the matter is related to eating habits.
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 some opine that prepared
food
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 is really unhealthy and expensive, in my view,
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 dishes are an inseparable part of the modern era. On the one hand, having a healthy diet is a top priority for many. To clarify, so seriously has having a healthy body affected a large number of people’s minds that they believe serving homemade dishes is one of the must-experience solutions for being in good shape, since fresh and locally sourced ingredients are usually used to cook traditional foods.
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,
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 goes a long
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 in urban areas. Nowadays, everybody has to work for long hours to meet their daily demands.
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, they do not have enough
time
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 to spend in the kitchen cooking mouth-watering cuisine. In
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way
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, they have no other choice but to serve
food
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 in restaurants and order convenience
food
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.
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, it allows them to take away their
food
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.
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, many spend most of their
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 at the workplace and even in public transportation.
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 provides the chance for them to eat their meals in their own
way
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. In conclusion,
although
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 underestimating the importance of the traditional
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 of cooking is not logical, I believe it does not necessarily mean it can be replaced by its modern counterpart, as people usually prioritise
time
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 over other things.

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coherence
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language
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structure
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content
It shows a willingness to discuss both sides of the issue.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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