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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Across all countries worldwide, the major problems that are raised are increasing
traffic
jam
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jams
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 and
pollution
. Many
people
 think that increasing the
price
 of petrol will help in solving these problems. I somehow agree with the statement, but, there are
others
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other
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 factors that can help
reducing
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reduce
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traffic
 and
pollution
 which we will elaborate
further
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on further
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 in the essay. By augmenting the
price
 of petrol could
be definitely be
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 one factor to reduce
densed
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dense
denied
traffic
 and
pollution
.
Consequently
,
People
 will be discouraged to take their own car and would favour public transport
such
 as
bus
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buses
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 and trams. But, there are other options to reduce
traffic
jam
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jams
show examples
 and
pollution
 as well ,
for example
, the government can give some facilities
such
 as
provide
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providing
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 electric scooters at a reduced
price
 so that
people
 can use
it
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them
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 to come
on
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to
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 the tram station or to move
in
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to
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 town without taking their cars.
Also
, another option to reduce
pollution
 could be to encourage
people
 to buy electrical cars at a much cheaper
price
.
Similarly
, in China, the government has put free
bicycles
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bicycle
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 stations in many areas to encourage
people
 to cycle which is a good exercise to keep fit and healthy.
Furthermore
, we have observed that during the pandemic of covid-19,
people
has
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have
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 been working from home which has massively reduced air
pollution
 and
traffic
 jam. Companies should encourage
people
 to work from home twice to thrice a week.
Moreover
,
other alternative
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another alternative
other alternatives
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 could be to provide more trams in different regions so that
people
 can stop using their own transport. Perhaps if the authorities provide some extra bonuses
such
 as when
people
 provide their bus or train tickets, they can get a reduction of tax on their salary. In conclusion, increasing the
price
 of petrol is not the only driver to reduce
pollution
 and
traffic
. There are different measures that should be taken by authorities and they should provide more facilities and encouragement to
people
.
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