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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Across all countries worldwide, the major problems that are raised are increasing
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and
pollution
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. Many
people
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 think that increasing the
price
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 of petrol will help in solving these problems. I somehow agree with the statement, but, there are
others
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other
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 factors that can help
reducing
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reduce
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traffic
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 and
pollution
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 which we will elaborate
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further
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on further
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 in the essay. By augmenting the
price
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 of petrol could
be definitely be
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 one factor to reduce
densed
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dense
denied
traffic
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 and
pollution
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.
Consequently
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,
People
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 will be discouraged to take their own car and would favour public transport
such
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 as
bus
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buses
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 and trams. But, there are other options to reduce
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and
pollution
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 as well ,
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, the government can give some facilities
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 as
provide
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providing
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 electric scooters at a reduced
price
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 so that
people
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 can use
it
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them
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 to come
on
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to
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 the tram station or to move
in
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to
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 town without taking their cars.
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, another option to reduce
pollution
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 could be to encourage
people
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 to buy electrical cars at a much cheaper
price
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.
Similarly
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, in China, the government has put free
bicycles
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bicycle
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 stations in many areas to encourage
people
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 to cycle which is a good exercise to keep fit and healthy.
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, we have observed that during the pandemic of covid-19,
people
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has
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 been working from home which has massively reduced air
pollution
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 and
traffic
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 jam. Companies should encourage
people
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 to work from home twice to thrice a week.
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,
other alternative
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another alternative
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 could be to provide more trams in different regions so that
people
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 can stop using their own transport. Perhaps if the authorities provide some extra bonuses
such
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 as when
people
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 provide their bus or train tickets, they can get a reduction of tax on their salary. In conclusion, increasing the
price
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 of petrol is not the only driver to reduce
pollution
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 and
traffic
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. There are different measures that should be taken by authorities and they should provide more facilities and encouragement to
people
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.
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