Compared to the past, more younger adults take medications for degenerative diseases. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In the current modernisation,
people
's style of life has drastically changed in comparison to the past, resulting in more younger adults
to take
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medications for degenerative
disease
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. In
this
essay, I shall provide lucid examples and causes
to
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such
degradation of
health
. Long ago, most
people
were working manual
works
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which require much more effort and eventually,
people
were much more dynamic and healthy. Nowadays,
people
sit in an office where they feel more stressed and barely make movements,
thus
resulting
to
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poor
health
and obesity.
Similarly
,
instead
of walking,
people
take their cars to drive short distances, definitively causing illnesses
such
as cardiac, high cholesterol, diabetes and high blood pressure. We
unfortunately
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observe that young
people
have to take tabs earlier than they should.
Additionally
, the quality of
food
products
are
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of poor quality. There are more processed foods on the market which are rich in sugar, carbohydrates and grease.
People
were eating more healthy
food
long ago but nowadays, fast
food
and restaurants are
opened
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mostly everywhere and
people
are tempted to eat rich
food
which are drivers of a complicated
health
state.
Moreover
, meat and chicken are being grown with hormones and
likewise
, for vegetables, pesticides and artificial stimulants are added to them for rapid growth. All these factors are unfortunately deteriorating our
health
. In the past, children were playing in
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garden
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and
running
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in the neighbourhoods. But now, kids stay in their house, scotched to their
tablet
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and smartphone, meanwhile, eating snacks which contain
food
colorant
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,salt and oil. Obviously, all these factors are worsening
people
's
health
. In conclusion, being realistic, young
people
's
health
will continue to deteriorate as long their lifestyle does not change. The government should provide more facilities
such
as
sport
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complex
should
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be accessible to everyone freely.
Moreover
,
bio farming
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should be encouraged so that the products available to customers are healthy.
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