Compared to the past, more younger adults take medications for degenerative diseases. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In the current modernisation,
people
's style of life has drastically changed in comparison to the past, resulting in more younger adults to take
medications for degenerative Change the verb form
taking
disease
. In Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
this
essay, I shall provide lucid examples and causes to
Change preposition
of
such
degradation of health
.
Long ago, most people
were working manual works
which require much more effort and eventually, Fix the agreement mistake
work
people
were much more dynamic and healthy. Nowadays, people
sit in an office where they feel more stressed and barely make movements, thus
resulting to
poor Change preposition
in
health
and obesity. Similarly
, instead
of walking, people
take their cars to drive short distances, definitively causing illnesses such
as cardiac, high cholesterol, diabetes and high blood pressure. We unfortunately
observe that young Add the comma(s)
, unfortunately,
people
have to take tabs earlier than they should.
Additionally
, the quality of food
products are
of poor quality. There are more processed foods on the market which are rich in sugar, carbohydrates and grease. Change the verb form
is
People
were eating more healthy food
long ago but nowadays, fast food
and restaurants are opened
mostly everywhere and Replace the word
open
people
are tempted to eat rich food
which are drivers of a complicated health
state. Moreover
, meat and chicken are being grown with hormones and likewise
, for vegetables, pesticides and artificial stimulants are added to them for rapid growth. All these factors are unfortunately deteriorating our health
. In the past, children were playing in Add an article
the garden
garden
and Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
running
in the neighbourhoods. But now, kids stay in their house, scotched to their Wrong verb form
ran
tablet
and smartphone, meanwhile, eating snacks which contain Fix the agreement mistake
tablets
food
colorant
,salt and oil. Obviously, all these factors are worsening Change the spelling
colourant
people
's health
.
In conclusion, being realistic, young people
's health
will continue to deteriorate as long their lifestyle does not change. The government should provide more facilities such
as sport
complex Change the noun form
sports
should
be accessible to everyone freely. Correct pronoun usage
that should
Moreover
, bio farming
should be encouraged so that the products available to customers are healthy.Add a hyphen
bio-farming
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