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Tell me about advantages and disadvantages of living in big city

Nowadays, many
people
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 prefer to live in a large
city
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. Migration to the big
city
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 is more usual
between
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 young
people
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 during
the
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life. So, there is
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of pros and
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cons
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coins
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cons
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choose
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 the habitant for life. I attempt to talk about access facilities and pollution and healthy. At
first
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, the majority of
people
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 are living in
the
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metropolis or large cities. They would like to access the
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 and special places.
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, shopping is the most impressive
things
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thing
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 to select
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residential
residental
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a residental
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 house.
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, elderly
people
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 need to have
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a hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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 where can treat their patients. Some young
student
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students
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 move to the
city
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 to continue
education
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their education
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.
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, they try to
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achieve
acheive
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achieve
 their goals by going to
library
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the library
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. Various classes help them to more focus on their achievement.
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, there
is
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are
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 a few disadvantages
about
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to
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 moving to
large
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a large
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city
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.
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City's
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people
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 think that the population are growing fast and it causes to create water and air pollution. Sometimes, living becomes difficult.
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,
the
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consumerization
consumization
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consumption
 has become increased.
Teengers
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Teenagers
 and adults would tend to buy many things which are needed. So, they buy things and put
away
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them away
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 soon,
it
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which
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creates
creats
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creates
pollutions
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pollution
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. The rubbish is
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become
becomed
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became
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rised
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raised
 which can't recycle by governers as soon as possible. In conclusion, Living in a big
city
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 is one of
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opportunities
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the opprtunities
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opprtunities
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opportunities
 to achieve convenience, but it's better to consider
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disadvantages
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the disadavntages
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disadavntages
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disadvantages
 because
this
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 is
treat
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a treat
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 for
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healthy
healthly
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health
.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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