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The chart illustrates the changes in the percentages of five primary occupations in Canada between 1850 and 2020.   Overall, the most popular career for Canadians was servicing during the period, while energy and water took the

last

place. It is witnessed that the proportion of manufacturing, agriculture/fishing and energy/water exhibited downward trends over the years, whereas the other workforces

such

as services and construction showed rises. Canadian workforce’s rate for manufacturing was 36% in 1850 when taking the lead, yet the number experienced a sharp decline which was left one-fourth(9%) in 2020.

came services, one-

third

of the labour force can be seen in 1850, and rose significantly to more than 80% in 2020, outracing the previous proportion and seeing the greatest growth among the five employees. The figure for agriculture/fishing was ranked

third

, at 22% in1850.

However

, it hit a low point of only 1% at the end of the period. It is

also

worth noting that the number of construction was 5% in 1850,

then

it went up by 3% in 2020. Energy and water in Canada was the least popular career in Canada, at 3% in 1850,

then

dropped to 1% in 2020.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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196 words

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A person's worth nowadays, seems to be judged according to social statues and material possession. Old- fashion values such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. Do what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development ?