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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoo can help protect animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In today's contemporary world, an increasing number of
animals
 can be seen at
zoos
. Members of society would often argue and think it is fair treatment for
animals
,
however
, in my view
animals
 should not be captured in
zoos
 and should be allowed to live freely.
Firstly
,
animals
 living in
zoos
 do not get a natural habitat to live in.
This
 means they will be raised in captivity and will get cruel treatment like restricted movement.
As a result
, they cannot move around independently and enjoy the liberty of their life.
Moreover
, they do not adequate diet in the zoo as well, which is openly available in forests and wildlife sanctuaries;
hence
 their health condition deteriorates with time.
Consequently
, their life spans are not very long and they are prone to many risks of life.
For instance
, when I visited the Melbourne zoo
last
 year, I noticed the health condition of both the Lion and the Tiger was not very good, which most probably was because of lack of nutrition. There are,
nonetheless
, some individuals who think that
zoos
 protect
animals
 from the risks of the external world. It specifically benefits endangered species and the ones who are on the verge of extinction. When
such
 fauna is kept in
zoos
, they are constantly monitored by humans who
further
 conduct some research on them and provide them with proper medication and nutrition.
Therefore
, their situation improves and they become less likely to be prone to other external risks.
For example
, the Tasmanian devil is regularly looked after by many Australian
zoos
;
hence
 increasing their numbers which were decreasing dramatically in the past. In conclusion,
although
zoos
 are beneficial for some species of wildlife, they
also
 lead to bad living standards for others.
Thus
,
zoos
 should not capture
animals
 for the sake of public shows and earning money, as
animals
 have a right to live in their own space.
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