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It is important for all the cities and towns to have large outdoor public spaces, such as parks or squares. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There has been a controversy about the existence of large outdoor public
spaces
,
such
 as
parks
 or squares. Some say it's necessary to have these
spaces
 in cities; some have the opposite opinions. I think having large outdoor public
spaces
 is vital, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
,
parks
 can lessen our pressure. It's expected that due to technological development, we tend to have a heavier workload, and our working time is elongated;
in other words
, we may have to spend more time and energy on our jobs.
Therefore
, our living standards can be dampened, and it might stimulate the sales of tobacco and alcohol companies in order to release the pressure. At
this
 point, the existence of
parks
 can lessen our stress to a large extent; the smell and sound of plants and animals in
parks
 exert a positive influence on our emotions.
Second
, expanding our social circles. It's commonplace that big events always take place in large outdoor public
spaces
, like squares.
Hence
, when a city has these
spaces
, which can provide good opportunities to meet new people and make new friends.
For example
, when a concert takes place in a square, it can attract its fans to come. In
this
 case, you can find people who have the same interests as you in the concert; and
as a result
, you can extend your social circle.
On the other hand
, large outdoor public
spaces
 have some disadvantages as well.
For instance
, they constantly require a large amount of space in cities. As we know, to build large outdoor public
spaces
, the government has to draw an area exclusively for them;
thus
,
such
 a situation can force the surrounding communities to move, and brings about housing insufficiency on account of these large outdoor public
spaces
. In conclusion, I believe the merits of public
spaces
 outstrip their demerits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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