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Topic: some people some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the heating system during my stay in your
hotel
.
To begin
 with, my wife and I recently spent our honeymoon in your
hotel
 from the 20th of September for a week. We are from Nigeria and had no knowledge it was winter in
United
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 States of America
as a result
 we did not plan for the weather. When we arrived in America, we realized everywhere was freezing cold. Unfortunately, your heating system was not working even though we paid for the most expensive room. That’s a shame. To avoid catching a cold, my partner and I went shopping for blankets and winter jackets.
This
 didn’t alleviate the cold
consequently
, we had to move to the Kings
Hotel
 at Pak Avenue for the rest of our vacation. That said, I would like to be refunded as we had to move to a different
hotel
 as your staff were unwilling to help.
In addition
, I hope you can fix the heaters as it could reduce the chances of previous guests returning. I hope to get
a
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feedback soon Yours faithfully, Esther
Imodu
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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