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Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of infornation should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words

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The maps illustrate the substantial modifications in the landscape and the development that had taken place
at
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in
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 the seaside
town
, called Portview, between 1990 and 2010. Overall, it can be clearly seen that during the 20 years, Portview was totally transformed.
To begin
 with the
town
 in 1990, Portview had very few facilities and structures. The main road was set up to the
center
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centre
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 of the
town
 from the north to the south, and there were two local roads constructed to link the main street. A shopping mall and a minimal resort were built to the west of
town
.
Additionally
, there was a huge farm surrounded by two places for doing outdoor activities which are playing golf and swimming. Turning to the east of the
town
, some stores were constructed. Surprisingly, there was only one pier located beside the sea. Moving on to the seaside
town
 in 2010, considerable changes were clearly observed. To the west of
town
, the farmland was demolished and replaced with
park
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 area same as the small resort was replaced with many hotel buildings. The golf course and the swimming place were developed as well as the department store. A footpath connecting the mainline road leads to the swimming area through the new
park
, so citizens can take some rest in the
park
. To the east of the
town
, A new car
park
 was placed to the north.
Moreover
, the coffee shop was resized, and some shops and pier were expanded.
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