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Some findings have revealed that cities around the world are growing larger. Could you outline the possible causes? What are the solutions?

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Many researchers are working on overpopulation of the urban
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. Some of them said that the population of the
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 increases day by day due to many reasons. In the following essay, the roots of
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 problem as well as its remedies will be discussed.
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 contemporary era everyone is migrating to the city due to educational institutions.
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, many students after completing their intermediate education level get admission to universities that are located in big
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 so, the graduates used to live in hostels or apartments which causes crowds in the city.
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, most job opportunities are available in urban
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 as compared to rural
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. That's why many people go to the city which arouses crowding.
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, everyone wants a lifestyle full of luxuries and facilities which is not possible in villages, so families preferred to live in the big towns.
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, these causes affect the environment of
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. There are some appropriate solutions.
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, the government should establish colleges and universities in small towns.
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, the organizations should provide jobs equally in the villages and
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.
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, people should live a natural and healthy life which is possible
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areas
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. In conclusion, every problem has a solution. To overcome the situation population should follow the alternatives rather than move.
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